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Fanfic MST: My Immortal [part 8]

We get to meet another character from Harry Potter canon in this story, although she may be a little tough to recognize. Brace yourselves.

Recap: Ebony and Draco were having sex when she noticed he’s got a tattoo saying “Vampire.” This is vague, but she correctly assumed that it’s in reference to Harry, who you might recall goes by Vampire now. She stormed off to yell at Vampire for… having had a relationship with Draco at some point, I guess.


AN: stop flassing ok! 

I’ll try my best.

if u do den u r a prep!

Like I said, I’ll try my best!

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Everyone in the class stared at me and then Draco came into the room even though he was naked and started begging me to take him back.

To reiterate: Draco is completely naked, possibly still sporting a boner, and just barged into a classroom full of students. And Snape.

“Ebony, it’s not what you think!” Draco screamed sadly.

My friend B’loody Mary Smith smiled at me understatedly. 

Ebony’s not the only one who gets a random apostrophe in her name!

B’loody Mary Smith is one of the major recurring characters in this story, and she isn’t an OC, so I bet you can guess who she really is. If not, we’re about to find out anyway.

She flipped her long waste-length gothic black hair and opened her crimson eyes like blood that she was wearing contact lenses on. 

Again we have a character smiling at Ebony before opening her eyes.

She had pale white skin that she was wearing white makeup on. Hermione was kidnapped when she was born. 

…yeah.

Her real parents are vampires and one of them is a witch but Voldemort killed her mother and her father committed suicide because he was depressed about it. She still has nightmares about it and she is very haunted and depressed. It also turns out her real last name is Smith and not Granger. (Since she has converted to Satanism she is in Slytherin now not Griffindoor. )

While Slytherin House gets a bad rap for its history of churning out evil wizards (Voldemort and most of his followers) and because of its distaste for Muggle-born wizards, there’s no association between being a Slytherin and being a Satanist, and Hogwarts students aren’t re-sorted into different houses if their views change following their initial sorting in the first year. I’m sure I didn’t need to tell you all that, though.

Having only one magical parent also wouldn’t make Hermione — sorry, B’loody Mary — a very popular Slytherin anyway. 

“What is it that you desire, you ridiculous dimwit!” Snape demeaned angrily in his cold voice but I ignored him.

“You ridiculous dimwit” is a great insult.

“Vampire, I can’t believe you cheated on me with Draco!” I shouted at him.

Everyone gasped.

Possibly because you just accused Vampire, whom you’re not in a relationship with and only just met, of cheating on you.

I don’t know why Ebony was so mad at me. 

We’ve just randomly switched to Draco’s perspective.

I had went out with Vampire (I’m bi and so is Ebony) for a while but then he broke my heart. He dumped me because he liked Britney, a stupid preppy fucker. 

Britney the prep shows up a few times in this story, but she’s basically got no personality other than being a stereotypical preppy girl. Vampire’s crush on her appears to be a thing of the past, so, no, we don’t get any goth-x-prep romance.

Also, while I do like the confirmation that Ebony is bi, I have to reiterate that we never see her so much as flirt with a girl in this story.

We were just good friends now. He had gone through horrible problems, and now he was gothic. (Haha, like I would hang out with a prep.)

We never find out what the “horrible problems” Vampire went through were, either. I mean, aside from his parents being murdered by Voldemort when he was a baby, growing up in an abusive household, and repeated attempts on his life by Voldemort throughout the canon books, since none of that seems to be relevant in this fanfic.

“But I’m not going out with Draco anymore!” said Vampire.

“Yeah fucking right! Fuck off, you bastard!” I screamed. 

Back to Ebony’s perspective, where we remain until chapter 37.

I ran out of the room and into the Forbidden Forest where I had lost my virility to Draco and then I started to bust into tears.

Where she lost her virility. My trans girl Ebony theory is making more and more sense!

Fanfic MST: My Immortal [part 9]

Fanfic MST: My Immortal [part 7]